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Describe an occasion that you wore formal clothes?

#occasion #clothes
In IRAN we usually wear formal clothes in
weddings party but
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the wedding party, but
the wedding party but
wedding party but
 for
me
of me or myself
my
first
 time I wore a formal clothes for an interview for
IMAM SADEGH University
Suggestion
the IMAM SADEGH University
. There are some people who have a different
act
 when they wear a formal or special
cloth
; but for
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 people it doesn’t matter what they have
worn
not subject to defeat
won
, they just
act
 and do everything same as before. So it depends on our perspective or our approach to the life as default and after that it influences on our
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
; you
may be wear
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may wear
 a special
cloth but
Accept comma addition
cloth, but
act
 like a stupid or a general person;
conversely you
Accept comma addition
conversely, you
may be wear
Suggestion
may wear
 a low level shirt or pants or coat or something else but
act
 like a professional person
;
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; consequently, your
consequently
 your personality is more important than
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 factor like
cloth
. In IRAN we have a particular time to change our
cloth
 and it is AIDE NOROOZE; for coming a new year. There are several stores
for
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to
 buy clothes; some stores have expensive goals and a
little
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few
 of them have a
fairness
Suggestion
fair
 price; as it was mentioned it depends on people and which stores they
prefer but
Accept comma addition
prefer, but
 in my family; we
initially
 search about best, fairness and
more cheaper
Suggestion
cheapest
 price as possible and we never buy anything until we go to all stores and after that we maybe buy something. Another point is these days people wear formal clothes more than before because almost all of
organizations
Suggestion
the organizations
 want from their employee to be present in company with a
suit which
Accept comma addition
suit, which
 employees should be there with it and some schools have ordered to parents that buy a special and
united suit
Suggestion
a united suit
 for their children.
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