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Some people believe that nowadays we have so many choices. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

#people #choices
Some folks claim that with the globalization of our world, we can choose between more options than before. I agree with
this
 subject due to the fact of online shopping and various ways of transportation lead to
this
 variety of choices that we have. In
this
 essay, I will debate both of those mentioned factors. On the one hand, without any hesitation, the invention of the internet totally changed our world and brings mankind closer to each other. One of the main services that the internet provide is the range of online shops that you can select between them despite
this
 fact that whether it is close to your house or not.
For example
, one of the successful shops among them is Amazon, that becomes a billion-dollar company,
besides
 that, it gives you a
lot
 of elections from different countries to select. So, it is inevitable that online shops changed our lifestyle and give us a
lot
 of options.
On the other hand
, one of the main reasons for
this
 diversity of options is the range of transportation means. After the industrial revolution that leads to the usage of trains and ships in
more efficient way
Suggestion
a more efficient way
, it changed the world in a
lot
 of ways that we have not seen before.
Furthermore
, it makes it much easier to ship cargo from different countries to other territories.
For instance
, you can buy a Colombian coffee when you are sitting in a flat in London. So, the change in the transportation methods conveyed to a variety of options. In conclusion, without any doubt, those two factors that I mentioned in my paper, caused a
lot
 of options to select among them that we have nowadays.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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