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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweight the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The Study of materials at the
Atomic
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Atom
 level has lead to major discoveries of
nature
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the nature
 and impact of various elements like Hydrogen, Uranium and Plutonium. It was designed as a weapon by the Americans to bring
Facist Japanese empire
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a Facist Japanese empire
 at surrender and end the conflict of the World War II in the pacific
however
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 many
scientist
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scientists
 didn't really understand the impact of
nuclear bomb
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a nuclear bomb
nuclear bombs
the nuclear bomb
; Fat Man and Little boy which
were dropped
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was dropped
 off on the cities of Hiroshima and Nagasaki and were shocked
from
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by
 the level of damaged it caused to the populace
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 with subsequent studies scientist were able to use nuclear
technology
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 for civil purposes as well. We will discuss the various topics which help us understand the benefits and challenges of nuclear
technology
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. The subsequent arms races of cold war and advancement of science and technologies government across the world choose to use the nuclear
technology
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 for civil and military uses, for small country like Pakistan and North Korea which faced challenges from its bigger Military powers like India and US, the Nuclear bomb really worked as a deterrent for conventional war with the simple reason of esclation of conflict to nuclear level where as countries like Germany and Japan the villians of World War II which had to sign harsh treaties to disarm its military utilised the Nuclear
technology
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 by using lower grade enriched Uranium for Power generation to meet the demand of Industralised Economy. The
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usage
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use
 of nuclear
technology
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 can help countries avoid dependence on fossil fuels and reduce the impact of carbon emission
on
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in
to
 the atmosphere to reduce the negative effects of climate change. The use of Nuclear
Technology
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 has been debated by the scientific community since its inception the challenges like Radioactivity and threat of accidents at the civil nuclear power plant, the disposal of nuclear waste it far more complicated than many realise, the accidents of
Soviet Union city
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the Soviet Union city
 of Chernoby and recent accident of Fukishima Plant in Japan are
such
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 examples. The
usage
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 of nuclear
technology
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 is
double edge sword
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a double edge sword
 which carries both challenges and opportunities for the community as a whole. I believe if the
usage
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 of
technology
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 is carefully monitored for civil
purposes we
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purposes, we
 can actually cut down the carbon dioxide levels and protect the nature. The benefits of
usage
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 of nuclear
technology
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 in civil and
miliary
of or relating to the study of the principles of warfare
military
usage
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has
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have
 more advantages than disadvantages.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Mutually Assured Destruction
  • deterrent
  • nuclear proliferation
  • low emissions
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • cancer treatment
  • diagnostic imaging
  • catastrophic accidents
  • radioactive waste
  • geopolitical tension
  • arms race
  • resistance
  • public perception
  • energy policy
  • environmental impact
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