some people believe that, health care should recieve more money to the state. However, others feel that there are another more imprtant spheres which need more money from state budget. discuss both opinion and give your view.

Many people are of the opinion that, the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
take
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takes
the responsibility of the citizen's
health
and provide free medical care, whereas, other people think that it is not essential to spend a lot of money on improving the
health
of the population. A
health
care
system
is a big important part of a country as it is a key factor for the developed countries.
Firstly
, a
state
that has both physically and mentally healthy citizens, the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
will never need other citizens of
thestate
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the state
, and salaries paid by the
state
remain in the
state
.
Secondly
, in each country the Ministry of
health
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
Health
provides financial
support
to it is
employes
having your services engaged for; or having a job especially one that pays wages or a salary
employed
employees
employers
, which helps to increase their educational potential.
This
will lead to an increase in the number of educated people. Uzbekistan,
for example
, there and a functional approach to allocate more money for
health
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the health system
health systems
system
. Providing
,
Accept space
,
someone is seriously ill, there is certainly a need for strong doctors in abroad. An effective way to improve the current situation, it is necessary to provide training of young specialists to abroad.
Finally
,
Accept space
,
as a result
, the
health
sector is enriched with educated staff.
on
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On
the one hand, the
goverments
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government's
allocation of funds in
this
system
also
in
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
way
inapproprite
not suitable for a particular occasion etc
inappropriate
.
For instance
, educational sphere is essential and always need of
support
. In
this
reason, heads of
state
must
simultaniously
at the same instant
simultaneously
support
healty
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
and education. If
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
did help with
these
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these systems
this system
system
, they would
been
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be
an increase and the appropriations will
also
be
justifield
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justified
.
in
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In
conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that increased financial
support
in
health
care, it could help to raise the quality of
locally
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local
specialist and it provides a place for the population to be cured during illnesses that need to be treated.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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