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Luck is the main factor that determines success. Do you agree or disagree?

#luck #factor #success
In our life in order to achieve something we truly want is based on how lucky we are. Some people consider the place where you are now
owing
Suggestion
owed
 to your
luck
, while others think not only because of our
luck
 we attain everything, but
also
 due to our our commitment and hard
work
. I agree with both statements and will outline the reasons below. The
luck
 and hard
work
 are integrally vital in achieving success and they could not exist separately as one fills another by maximizing chances to succeed. Some people argue that beyond the achievement stays only
luck
,
conversely
, I personally know that to gain success
luck
 is insufficient. I can not say
luck
 is not imperative, unlike it is invaluable part in climbing a professional ladder.
However
, I would like to give an example, most of the successful leaders in the world were not born as lucky as they are now,
on the contrary
, they really worked for it.
Moreover
, nothing comes easily, especially
success
Accept comma addition
success, however
however
 lucky we are. Even lucky ones should merit it by working hard. We can rely on
luck
 on the condition that we genuinely possess abundant knowledge and experience,
on the other hand
, some people underestimate the value of hard
work
 only depending on
luck
. With the help of
luck
 we could barely achieve accomplishment it can be possible when we go on working hard and believing in our
luck
 inasmuch as
luck
 is inherent in our hard
work
. Overall, both
luck
 and hard
work
 play a vital part in succeeding everything. So we should own not only
luck
, but
also
 hardworking too.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attribute
  • dedication
  • continuous learning
  • unforeseen opportunities
  • propel
  • serendipity
  • disproportionately
  • pivotal
  • perceived
  • embedded
  • achievements
  • adaptability
  • 'self-made'
  • nuanced understanding
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