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It is important to give children an opportunity to become independent and make decisions from early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #opportunity #decisions #age
Mankind, up-to-now, have been in
fight
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a fight
the fight
fights
 or their autonomy.
Therefore
,
also
 children
strive
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strives
to
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for
 freedom from their parents. I am of the opinion that it is necessary to give independence to children so it will be great support
them
a cooperative unit (especially in sports)
team
 to solve difficulties and decision-make when they are hard
situation
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situated
situate
. The main reason why I agree with
idea
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the idea
 that it will make them self-
controled
restrained or managed or kept within certain bounds
controlled
 person. When they encounter with heavy problems, don’t lose themselves and try to exceed their problems. Because of
this
characteric
children
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child
 will live cosily when they grow up. A
further
 point in favour of my agreement is children’s getting elder
in
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into
 a self-confident character. İt will be
assistant
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assisting
assisted
assist
 them
dring
all the way through
during
drain
drying
whole life
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the whole life
 in their career and family So,
this
 character is main to be brave and creative citizen of
country
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the country
a country
. Children are must taught as a decision-making and assertive. İf we can bring up our children like
this
, it will contribute to development of the world

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