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The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, a lot of y
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youngsters are
spending their precious
time
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 at the shopping malls. It is thought that it has a negative impact on them and society. I completely agree with
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 statement because of some reasons for
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. Spending
time
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 in the shopping malls can be beneficial for youngsters in some cases. o
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of them is that, buying things there they can learn how to choose high quality products themselves. Nowadays we often face a poor quality p
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product
and youngsters should know what products good and not.
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, they will learn purchasing things considering their financial condition. Parents give to their child money for enjoying the entertainment and buying what they need. But sometimes there can be a lack of k
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the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
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to do both.
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will learn how to divide the money for both for enjoying them.
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, youngsters by spending a lot of
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 in shopping c
enters,
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
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can lose
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things
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. In their early periods of l
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life, it
is better spending
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 at libraries, reading books or self-studying rather than spending and wasting too much
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 at amusement places.
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, usually young people buy too much unneccessary things and waste the money
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 of buying something beneficial for them In conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that knowing the enjoyment and studying is very useful for them and for their future life

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