Some people say that what children watch influences their behavior. Others believe the amount of time they spend on television influences their behavior most. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Perhaps the idea of watching
TV
causes children’s behaviour badly that has become a widespread one in recent decade, with many individuals holding different beliefs on it.
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definitely agree
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the above expressed
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a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc
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,
and there are many compelling reasons to support my view. In the
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
think television
is having
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has
a huge
nigative
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
impact in Society. The fact that
childrent
a young person of either sex
children
link violence on
televesion
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
with
crime rate
Suggestion
the crime rate
crime rates
in the real world. Children can easily copy the behaviour they see on the screen. Namely, nowadays many youth
TV
programms
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
programmes
programmers
are based mainly
voilence
an act of aggression (as one against a person who resists)
violence
violins
, swearing, bullying, and horror films that youths are
bacoming
according with custom or propriety
becoming
an
addvctive
causing or characterized by addiction
addictive
.
In addition
, not only affect
behaviour but
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behaviour, but
aslo
in addition
also
children less health
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
they
sepend
pass time in a specific way
spend
their most of time in front of
TV
screen
insteade
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
of playing
activity
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action
active
games.
As a result
, it is leading to
childern’s
eyesight problems at their early ages.
On the other hand
, advertisers often aim their market at children that they can be easily influenced by
adevertisments
. For
istance
an occurrence of something
instance
, when children see adverts of heroes films or
comyuter
a machine for performing calculations automatically
computer
games that they put pressure to buy them that are
waste
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a waste
of money and useless.
Moreover
, some
TV
programms
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
programmes
do not require much
tought
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
thought
taught
that same cartoons include only love stories not moral
fary
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Fary
faery
-tales. Whereas it is not
suit
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suited
for youth while they are
learing
the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge
learning
leading
wearing
moralities and kinds. In conclusion,
although
both factors have their own
imflications
something that is inferred (deduced or entailed or implied)
implications
. I concur that parents should choose what they their children watch and Advertising during
children
Suggestion
children's
programs must be strictly controlled.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • behavior
  • television
  • content
  • violent
  • inappropriate
  • aggressive
  • attitudes
  • imitate
  • actions
  • language
  • amount
  • time
  • screen time
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • academic performance
  • exposure
  • social interactions
  • creativity
  • monitor
  • control
  • caregivers
  • parents
  • limit
  • engage
  • activities
  • opinion
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