some people think that young people should go to university to further their education while other thinks that they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc to serve society. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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this
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sophisticate era, Education became a crucial part of the human's
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life, especially
in order to set the
job
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target.Many individual envisage that
young generation
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the younger generation
younger generation
must be motivated for
further
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education in universities.
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,
other
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others
believe that they might be chosen by some skill based
job
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instead
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of
further
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studies.
personally
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Personally
, I will adopt a path of post
graduation
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. I will shed light on my opinions in
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the upcoming paragraphs
. To commence with, Higher study is essential for the pupils.As, during
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graduation they
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graduation, they
attain some professional knowledge regarding their particular stream because only a
therotical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
theatrical
vertical
work
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will not be fruitful.
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,
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,
some practical
work
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is required.
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, a doctor can'
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be considered as a doctor until he didn'
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get some professional knowledge or
incase
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in case
of no license.
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consequently
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Consequently
, it is tough to get
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job
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jobs
after
graduation
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if their competitor
have
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has
masters degree
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a masters degree
.
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on
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On
the contrary side, In
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
70% of
citizens
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the citizens
belongs to a
medocare
moderate to inferior in quality
mediocre
families
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family
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, students are most likely prefer their
job
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to be
strengthen
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strengthened
strengthening
the financial condition during their
graduation
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.
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,
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,
they want to be an independent in
a
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an
early age.
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, some youths are interested in the skill based
job
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and continue that particular
work
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.
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,
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,
An electrical engineer can'
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be considered perfect, if he didn'
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have practice
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have to practice
.As, practice makes a man perfect.
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why the skill based
job
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prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
prepared
by the worker. To sum up
,
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,
Even though,
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phenomenon gives a strong opportunity
to
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for
the youngsters to
work
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in
a
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an
early
age but
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age, but
the higher studies
gives
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give
are given
a
more stronger
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stronger
chance to get
well positioned
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a well positioned job
the well positioned job
well positioned jobs
job
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.
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, I envisage
,
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,
It is a golden
opportunity whether
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opportunity, whether
it comes later or sooner does not matter.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • higher education
  • vocational training
  • skillset
  • employment landscape
  • economic contributions
  • hands-on experience
  • critical thinking skills
  • practical knowledge
  • tuition fees
  • trade professions
  • essential workforce
  • academic qualifications
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