some people think that young people should go to university to further their education while other thinks that they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc to serve society. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

In
this
sophisticate era, Education became a crucial part of the human's
life especially
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life, especially
in order to set the
job
target.Many individual envisage that
young generation
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the younger generation
younger generation
must be motivated for
further
education in universities.
However
,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
believe that they might be chosen by some skill based
job
instead
of
further
studies.
personally
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Personally
, I will adopt a path of post
graduation
. I will shed light on my opinions in
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
. To commence with, Higher study is essential for the pupils.As, during
graduation they
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graduation, they
attain some professional knowledge regarding their particular stream because only a
therotical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
theatrical
vertical
work
will not be fruitful.
Therefore
,
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,
some practical
work
is required.
For instance
, a doctor can'
t
be considered as a doctor until he didn'
t
get some professional knowledge or
incase
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in case
of no license.
consequently
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Consequently
, it is tough to get
job
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jobs
after
graduation
if their competitor
have
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has
masters degree
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a masters degree
.
on
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On
the contrary side, In
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
70% of
citizens
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the citizens
belongs to a
medocare
moderate to inferior in quality
mediocre
families
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family
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, students are most likely prefer their
job
to be
strengthen
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strengthened
strengthening
the financial condition during their
graduation
.
As a result
,
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,
they want to be an independent in
a
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an
early age.
Although
, some youths are interested in the skill based
job
and continue that particular
work
.
For instance
,
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,
An electrical engineer can'
t
be considered perfect, if he didn'
t
have practice
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have to practice
.As, practice makes a man perfect.
That is
why the skill based
job
prefered
more desirable than another
preferred
prepared
by the worker. To sum up
,
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,
Even though,
this
phenomenon gives a strong opportunity
to
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for
the youngsters to
work
in
a
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an
early
age but
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age, but
the higher studies
gives
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give
are given
a
more stronger
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stronger
chance to get
well positioned
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a well positioned job
the well positioned job
well positioned jobs
job
.
Therefore
, I envisage
,
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,
It is a golden
opportunity whether
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opportunity, whether
it comes later or sooner does not matter.
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  • higher education
  • vocational training
  • skillset
  • employment landscape
  • economic contributions
  • hands-on experience
  • critical thinking skills
  • practical knowledge
  • tuition fees
  • trade professions
  • essential workforce
  • academic qualifications
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