The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.

The charts below show the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990.
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The bar charts
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involvement in 2 sectors including education and science. The data is found
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from developing and industrialised
countries
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from 1980 to 1990.
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the first chart,
average
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years
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of schooling in developing
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were just around 2
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while
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at the same time,
industrialised
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countries
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reached over 8
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, increasing 4 times. After 10
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, developing
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were
stilll
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still
under 4
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of schooling.
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, the figure
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average
years
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of schooling soared over 10
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in industrialised
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. It can be observed from the
second
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chart, the number of scientists and
techniciants
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technicians
of
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in
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industrialised
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were
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always higher than that
developing
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of developing
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countries
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. In industrialised
countries
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were reached over 40 scientists and
techniciants
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technicians
and about 70 people in 1980,1990
respectedly
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respectively
. Meanwhile, during 10
years
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, developing
countries
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were not rose to 20 per 1000 people. It is obvious to see from the final bar chart, during a decade, there was a downward trend in developing
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, they just spend about 50
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US to nearly 10
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billions
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on
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Research and Development. Since 1980, Industrialized
countries
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spend 170
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billions
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dollar and increased
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to over 340
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billions
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on Research and Development in 1990.
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, It is
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that
industrialied
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industrialised
industrialized
countries
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had more
envolving
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involving
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level
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levels
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than developing
countries
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in education and science.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, years, billions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment rates
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • tertiary education
  • literacy rates
  • scientific research
  • research and development (R&D)
  • correlation
  • gender disparities
  • participation
  • developing countries
  • industrialized countries
  • investment
  • comparison
  • impact
  • specified years
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