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Some people say that the amount of noise that people make should be strictly controlled. Others say that people should be free to make as much noise as they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Throughout the twenty-
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 century have been increasing the population of people, due to countries tending for urban sprawl, and technology have been changing dramatically; thereby all these factors significantly increase the
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 of
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 that now named the
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 pollution.
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, some people, especially the scientists, want strict control of
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level
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;
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, others have the opposite view. Overall, in my perspective, people should adjust the
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 because the scientists have proof that it leads to a more healthy life. On the one hand, people have different devices that loud sound, or they tend to make
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 party.
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, in their opinion, restriction of
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 is touching
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 activities that are broken freedom of people in part "do that you want".
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, on the surface of the problem with loud lie traffic congestion, there people create a lot of cacophony; thereby private vehicles undergo strict control too, and it leads to a trouble with the
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 liberty of people.
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, the ban on private cars leads to implement public transport that cuts the right of choice. Notwithstanding, the scientists prove what all around the world suffer from
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 pollution in the part of the sickness,
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 they want to adjust the
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 of loudness that diminish
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 problem.
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, Bali implements the day of silent when nothing works, and the scientists notice significant changes in
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 day in wildlife.
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, in Canada, for preserving some species of fish, the volunteers ask to create on ship less
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, because all loud destroy hearing that hinder navigation and hunt.
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, people throughout the years, in megalopolises, more and more complain of headache and problem with hearing. To conclude, I think people around the world should understand the depth of the trouble, and unavoidable strict control of some type of
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 in the future their and environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • mental and physical well-being
  • hearing loss
  • sleep disturbances
  • stress levels
  • freedom of expression
  • cultural expression
  • social interactions
  • economic benefits
  • property values
  • tourism and hospitality
  • entertainment and construction industries
  • thoughtful noise regulations
  • public health
  • economic and cultural considerations
  • zone-based noise control
  • flexibility
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