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Your local newspaper wants to reward people who have contributed a lot to the community. Write a letter to the newspaper.

#newspaper #reward #people #community
Dear Editor, I am writing in regard to the advertisement you posted in your newspaper about rewarding people who have contributed to the
community
. I would like to nominate Mrs. Rachel Matt who
work
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 as a teacher at N.V.M School, Bangalore. She served a lot for the school and
community
 including taking
initiative
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on helping
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 students
to
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meet their needs,
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 students to attend school who dropped out and
she is
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 a visionary leader who addressed the various
community
 needs. She is characterized
with
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 unique qualities of being human, integrity and
kind
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 nature. She
also
 joined
with
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a
community
 club and took
initiative
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in providing
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 housing facilities for people who cannot afford it. We have a lot to learn from a personality like her and I believe we have to show our gratitude in some ways and it seemed
this
 opportunity is the best way to show our respect for her contributions. By looking at her dedication and care towards the
community
, I would like to recommend her name for
“Wonder
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 Woman Award”. The monetary benefit from the
community
 will help her to extend the work and more people can come together and join the hands to serve the
community
 in a better way. Thank you for giving your attention and hope I will receive the news from you soon. Yours faithfully, Ram Nath
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coherence cohesion
The letter could have a clearer paragraph structure. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea or aspect of Mrs. Matt's contributions.
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The letter provides a complete and suitable response addressing all aspects of the task. It clearly nominates Mrs. Rachel Matt and explains her contributions to the community effectively.
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The tone of the letter is appropriately formal and respectful for the context.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens with a clear greeting and ends with a polite closing, maintaining a formal structure.

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