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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both side and give your opinion.

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Dwelling in the suburbs or village has been a constant debatable issue for the years. While some opine that living in the city is more beneficial, others have a
view
 that living in town offer more advantages. I,
however
, agree with the latter
view
 because of less health issues and On the one hand, it is thought by some that city dwellers have a better lifestyle as people living in the big cities have a good job opportunities, higher tertiary education for their children and better medical facilities as compared to the villages.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by Oxford University found that 69% of total population seems to shift from small village to big cities in order to have better university education and job prospects.
Therefore
,
such
 benefits attract a lot of stress and anxiety, which gives me a valid reason not to agree with
this
view
.
On the other hand
, others believe that people living in a town have many positive aspects because not only do they not have to deal with traffic issues while commuting from home to work, but
also
 they are less likely to face health issues which are absolutely the biggest drawbacks of living in the cities.
For instance
, a recent article in the Times of India in March 2019 reveals that citizens of the countryside are much healthier and fit than city dwellers due to less population resides in villages.
Thus
, I agree with
this
view
 countryside imparts a better life. In conclusion, despite getting a better education and job prospects, I believe living in the countryside is more advantageous as people tend to save time without sticking in the traffic and keeps themselves fit and healthy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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