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children are now less active in their free time than in the past. Therefore, sports lessons must be compulsory in schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#children #time #sports #lessons #schools
Today children
pr
for each, or for every
per
or
 adult spend their leisure
time
 at home watching
tv
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TV
 and playing
computer game
Suggestion
computer games
a computer game
. The main cause is that the parents ignore their son or daughter to do in free
time
. Children must be busy with do
sport
 in free
time but
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time, but
 they only do
sport
 in school. So
sport
 lessons will be
increase
Suggestion
increased
 and they must be compulsory. I agree to some extent and now in an essay essay, I will provide. It is right that all children do not do
sport
.
For example
,
firstly
, they do not enjoy it. Some young must not do
sport
. Perhaps the doctor was forbidden. So they should do another
sport
such
 as
chess
Suggestion
Chess
.
Secondly
,
sport
 lessons are a waste of valuable study
time
. If you want to enter the institute
this
time
, you should only a necessary subject for you. In other hands, if
sport
 lessons are increased or be compulsory, school
need
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needs
 to spend a lot money on
sport's
Suggestion
sports
sport
 facilities. Maybe buy some
sport
 instruments or built a new gym and others. In spite of these
cause
Suggestion
causes
,
sport
 is the most important for all people.
Firstly
,
physical active
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physical, active
physically active
 improves children's mental well being.
For example
, if they are often occupied at
sport
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the sport
a sport
 which are chess or draught, they will be more active than
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 children.
Secondly
,
sport
help
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helps
adult
Suggestion
adults
 to learn
discline
a branch of knowledge
discipline
disc line
 and work with others as a team. Some kind of sports which are football, basketball are played team by players. They help each other to win
to
being one more than one
two
game
Suggestion
games
 and they learn to understand to someone or to help though playing. In other ways, if pupils do
sport
, they are not unfit. So the government
have not
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have, not
 to spend money a lot for medical care. To sum up, children always should do sports because of children who do not enjoy
sport
 are worse than adult who do
sport
.

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