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Some people are born to be a leadership others belive that leadership can be learned. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #leadership #belive
Certain individuals believe that everything alw
ays depend on
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always depends
 the nature of the person while other people claim that every talent can be taught wit
h ex
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by
perience during the life and I agree with them. Now the following paragraphs will have a look both concepts. On the one hand, some conservatives, including parents often insist that leadership comes from the people's nature.
That is
 because some babies tend to have certain talents,
for example
, their exceptional memory.In the long tur
n they th
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turn, they
ink that those children will become
lea
der be
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a leader
leaders
the leader
cause of their talent.
Furthermore
, for those supporters children's achievement are
often varied
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is often varied, although
is often varied although
although
 they are educated in the same atmosphere..
On the other hand
, the majority of people, particularly teachers or psychologists support the opposite view.
In other words
, leadership is highly likely to be gained from man's experiences throughout the life. Personally, I suspect that nurture is paramount for every hum
anbeing.
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human being
For instance
, provided that family or friends can support the person it will probably result in good benefit for those who are trying to succeed in being
lea
der. O
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a leader
leaders
the leader
n the top of that,be
c
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,
oming guide in a field always require a determination and enthusiasm. To conclude,wh
e
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,
reas some point out that every
leader
 are
born wi
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bears
th that talent and nature decides who the person bec
ome in
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becomes
 future, I suspect that character which persuade to be
lea
der co
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a leader
uld be learned.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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