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Some people like to work in teams. Others prefer to work alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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There
 are two types of working. One of them is working with a
group
, another one is working individually.
Although
 some people prefer to
work
 alone, I believe it is much better to
work
 in teams. If we compare these two working types, the benefits of
team
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
work
 are more than those of working alone. The advantages of working with a
group
 can be found below.
Firstly
, I prefer working in a
team
 because
team
work
 allows a
person
 to
work
 according to his or her strength. Since the
group
 members apply their strong sides to the
work
, the completion time will be faster.
For instance
, I was involved in a car design
project
 several years ago. One
person
 made engineering calculations to understand which parts are critical
for
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to
 our design, I made the drawings of the car components, and another friend of mine made the presentation of our
project
 to the professor. He gave us a good response and additional points since we completed our
work
 before the due date. To be more precise, we did a good job, because we divided the
work
 according to our strong sides. Another reason why I prefer to
work
 with a
group
 is that I think that
this
 type of
work
 establishes a better relationship between the
team
 members. As humans, socialization is important for us and working with a
team
 gives us a chance to improve our relationship. When people are in a
team
, they have to communicate with each other at each step of the process.
For example
, in our
last
 year elective course, I made new friends because we were involved in a
team
project
 together. Thanks to the
project
, we did build a good relationship among each other, and we are still in touch.
Lastly
,
team
work
 improves the sense of responsibility. All
group
 members are aware that their performance affects the
group
, so all
group
 members try to do their best and
work
 hard to get better results.
For example
, a few years ago, some of my friends and I participated in a competition which was related to optimization. Since there were a lot of things to do, we divided the topics among each other. We did not have enough information about one of the shared parts.
However
, a
person
 who got that subject made a lot of effort to learn the topic well. He attended online courses and read books related to that field. Eventually, he accomplished a great job. What I am trying to say is that in a
group
 working, even if a
person
 does not have enough information related to his or her working area, he or she may learn the things with his or her effort because he or she knows that a mistake will cause negative outcomes. In conclusion, working with a
team
 makes the things easier and helps the people
work
 more happily. If we take into account all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that working in a
group
 has more advantages than working alone.

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