Public celebrations (festivals, national day) are held in some countries. Some people think that they are very expensive and the government should spend money on some other important issues. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the number of festivals or national events being held all over the world are rapidly increasing which leads to different countries spending

excessive amount

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excessive amounts

an excessive amount

of money for them to be

successful

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successful, however

however

many people believe that

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government should allocate their budget to more significant causes

such

as education and

healthcare

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health care

. To commence with, festivals can be helpful to a nation's economy. Important national festivities can attract tourists to flock the events

place prompting

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place, prompting

them to spend their money to purchase basic necessities

such

local foods, acquire comfortable

accomodation

making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances

accommodation

accommodations

and buy souvenirs.

In addition

, these festivals can increase the popularity of a country

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located at or attached to

on

encourage

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encouraging

investors to

operates

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operate

different types of businesses.

As a result

, these festivals can bring more employment to the local residents and boost the tourism industry

thus

aiding to an improved economy

On the other hand

, festivities needs a huge budget in order to showcase show-stopping shows and invite visitors that can help influence and encourage tourist to come which can be distributed to more important entities

such

as the department of health and education. With regards to healthcare, there are evident lack of equipments and manpower which can be rectified by a bigger funding from the government. Meanwhile, it is

apparent especially

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apparent, especially

in public schools that there is a declining number of teachers and teaching materials for students to utilize to ensure a quality learning experience for the younger generation. In conclusion, I partly agree that the government should give more significance to education and healthcare when allocating financial

respurces but

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resources, but

resources but

it

can not

can not

cannot

be denied that national events can be a way to generate income to a country.