students leave high school without learning the way to manage their money. What are the reasons and solutions of this issue?

Nowadays, It is fact that students do not learn the method of managing the
money
from the instructor, and
this
has been a debatable issue whether they should learn that or not. Unlearned about
that is
attributable to several
reason
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reasons
and there are several measures to settle the dispute. The reason why pupils graduate without knowing the way to
administration
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administrating
administrate
of
money
is that there are plenty of fundamental majors which are more significant than the
money
management. To develop
this
subject they should have
stength
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the strength
strength
and mathematical competence.
For example
, if one person without the physical health
study
management, it would be hard to
study
in
long run
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the long run
, and if they do not have
basic math ability
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the basic math ability
, it is not exaggeration to say that they will be difficult to understand
money
-related course books,
therefore
they have no time to
study
in-depth major
such
as
manging
be successful; achieve a goal
managing
mangling
Nanjing
skills. Another reason worth mentioning is that they are too young to consider normal ideas. To put it another way, they are impulsive and they have low ability to control
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
.
For example
, even though they instruct the method to manage their budget, they will not
recongnise
show approval or appreciation of
recognise
recognize
recognised
the importance of
money
and
also
they do not have enough
money
to manage it. To figure out
this
matter the government should take
actions
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action
.
To begin
with, they should invest in school to teach about the way since they might need more budget to operate financial
departmant
a specialized division of a large organization
department
departments
. To be specific, as they probably hire new educators and prepare related course book and purchase the systems that has virtual programmes, they need additional subsidies.
Furthermore
, the government
have
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has
to devote to manage-related
corperation
a business firm whose articles of incorporation have been approved in some state
corporations
corporation
which bring about many pupils to
study
financial major in order to be
a
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an
employees on those companies In conclusion, there are several rationales that why student
didn't be taught
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wasn't taught
was not taught
at school, and the government ought to put more emphasis on
management
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the management
of
money
to foster talents who will improve their national economy.
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