Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
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day and age, increasing numbers of people are surfing the Internet for shopping purpose due to its convenience. It is undeniable that shopping online has both positive and negative effects on people, to my way of thinking, it is more beneficial for people to shop online. On the one hand, Internet shopping conspicuously risky. Indeed, customers cannot directly experience their chosen products,
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, the product’s quality may not as same as the one in
advertisement
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the advertisement
or their expectation.
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, purchasers are not allowed to meet the seller face to face. As the result, they do not have any awareness of
troubles
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the troubles
they may get, namely cybercrime. As a matter of fact, there
is
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are
a huge number of
crime
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crimes
undercover of shopping online, by requiring customers to use
credit card
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a credit card
credit cards
, they steal
information
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the information
of buyers and
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, hackers can get money from those information easily. While it is true to say that shopping by means of the Internet contains a few
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risks
, in fact, clients still fond of shopping online for three main reasons.
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, online shopping allows consumers to receive a better service or a product from home. Customers
are no longer have
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no longer have
are no longer having
to travel a long distance or stuck in a crow to buy stuff, with only a smart device and the Internet, shopping is only a few
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fingers
tap. It not only leads people to the convenience in shopping but it
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also enhance
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also enhances
has also enhanced
the secure
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the security
of the customers.
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of paying in
cash which
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cash, which
may lead to
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unexpected situations
an unexpected situation
, namely robbery or burglary, consumers
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is allowed
to use e-payment which is safer and more environmentally friendly than conventional transaction.
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but not the least, shopping by means of computer benefits not only shoppers but
also
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sellers. By using e-commerce market, retailers can distribute their products worldwide, at the same time, customers have a variety of choice during their shopping time. In
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technological age, the number of people who shop by
e-commerce market
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the e - commerce market
has increased tremendously. Obviously,
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tendency brings both pros and cons, in my point of view, the advantages of
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kind of shopping is
outweighs
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outweighing
the drawback means.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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