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Band 7.5

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask your friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter : Give details of your study plan Explain why you want to take up the part time job Suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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I hope
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 letter finds you well! I am excited to inform you that I will soon be coming to your home country. Fortunately, I have been accepted into the university in town, which I have always dreamed of attending! I would greatly appreciate your assistance in finding a part-time job
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 I study. I will be living alone on a limited stipend, which is insufficient to cover rent and other personal necessities.
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, I am seeking a flexible job that accommodates my class schedule, which runs from 10 AM to 3 PM. If possible, could you help me explore the town together to find suitable employment?
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, it would be wonderful if you could ask around among your friends for any opportunities. I look forward to your response and appreciate any assistance you can provide. Best regards, Lina

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task achievement
Consider adding more details about your study plans, such as the course you will be studying or why you chose that particular university.
coherence cohesion
Try to include a summary sentence in your conclusion to reinforce the main points of your letter.
task achievement
The letter maintains a consistently polite and appreciative tone, suitable for a formal request to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is clear, with a dedicated paragraph for each main idea: study plans, reason for needing the job, and suggestions for help.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, which adds to the overall coherence of the letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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