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It is often said "when in Rome, do as the Romans do". Do you think people should adapt and accept the culture of the country they are visit? do you think it is possible to learn a culture without learning the language?

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A pretty popular phrase “When in Rome, do as the Romans do” suggests that travelling to another country is not just exploring a new area, but
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 accepting their culture and history. In my perspective, it is not necessary to learn another
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 to learn history, as plenty of sources to learn in convenient
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 are available. First of all, showing respect for local traditions is crucial when visiting another country. Without understanding the historical background, tourists may unintentionally offend locals or cause misunderstandings.
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, in Uzbekistan, the younger generation shows respect to elders by giving them seats on public transport. Tourists, which will fail to pass the seat, even unknowingly, may be perceived as disrespectful.
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, to avoid any misunderstandings and to foster positive relationships with citizens, it is important to be culturally aware. Gaining insight into a culture does not always require fluency in the local dialogue. In today’s digital era, a vast number of open sources with information in any speech are available, and the ability to use a smartphone is only needed.
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, websites
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 as Wikipedia provide understandable guidelines on how to behave appropriately in different regions, which travellers can learn without needing to learn the
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, with the amount of information available online, it is possible to understand a country’s perception without linguistic knowledge. In conclusion,
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 showing respect for local customs is essential to avoid misunderstandings and build positive relationships with locals, learning
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Your essay could benefit from a clearer introduction that outlines your main arguments. Consider expanding your thesis statement to better reflect the points you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects back to your thesis to help with logical flow. This will strengthen your coherence.
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Try to include some additional examples or more detailed explanations of your points to enhance the depth of your argument, especially in the second body paragraph.
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You provided a relevant example from Uzbekistan that effectively illustrates your point about respecting local customs.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay contains a good structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which facilitates understanding of your arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • adapt
  • accept
  • local customs
  • cultural immersion
  • enhance the travel experience
  • build relationships
  • smooth communication
  • misunderstandings
  • social isolation
  • conflicts
  • language barrier
  • cultural insights
  • participate in cultural activities
  • observe
  • local customs
  • language learning
  • deeper understanding
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