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Many students take part time jobs while studying in university. Do you think it is a good or bad idea?

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It is irrefutable that the cost of tertiary
education
 has become very high and
student
Suggestion
the student
have
Suggestion
has
 to
work
part
time
 to fund their
education
.
This
 situation has both positive and negative effects. In the following paragraphs,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 shall discuss the issue in depth. There are many reasons why working
part
time
 is beneficial while studying in university.
Firstly
, higher
education
 is very costly and students need to do
part
 in
time
work
 to fund their
education
.
Secondly
, the habit of working hard right from early years makes students realise the dignity of labour and they are better placed in life later on. What is more, students do not indulge in any violence and crime and drugs.
This
 is because they
donot
Suggestion
do not
 have
time
 for
such
 activities.
This
 is
also
 instils some discipline in their lives because they have to manage
time
 efficiently so that there's
to
being one more than one
two
 studies do not suffer.
Finally
, while doing these jobs, the developer network of friends doing different courses and from diverse backgrounds. In conclusion, I believe that being pushed to hard
work
 is a positive development.
However
, there should be a limit to
number
Suggestion
the number
 of hours students are allowed
part
time
work
,
otherwise
 studies will suffer.
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