The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Both maps display a bookstore, before and after it was reconstructed. Some departments were replaced by others and some were moved to another location. In 2000,on the left side of the
entrance
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the shop has a large row of bookshelves with fiction
books
. On the opposite side were
service
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the service
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desk and a little
further
-shelves with non-fiction
books
. The middle of
store
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the store
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was
also
occupied by rows of
books
on
such
fields ,as travel, art, hobbies, cookery and new
books
. Nowadays, the shop became more convenient and interesting in terms of choice for its visitors. New
books
and
books
for travel
as well as
service desk are still kept at their original places. The middle section of the shop
was feed
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was fed
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up
for
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with
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new sitting places ,conclude three tables and chairs
round
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around
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them.
However
, the fiction is given less space as it now ,is sharing a row with materials for art, hobbies and cookery.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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