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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the min legal age for driving a car or motorbike.To what extent do you agree/disagree

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There is no doubt that road accidents take thousands of lives
wolrdwide
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
world-wide
 daily.To curb
this
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 menace, a lions share of society ponders that increasing the legal
age
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 to drive a
vehical
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicle
 might be better
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while, I believe that some measures need to be taken by the government
also
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. To embark with, raising the lower
age
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 limit seems helpful
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because as the people grow, maturity comes. It could be clearly observed from the driving knacks of an adult and a youngster that former love rash driving, indulge in life risking stunts on bikes, while, latter appreciates the value of life and remain alert while driving. Adding more, one can expect good control and coordination between brain, hand
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and foot in
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a
 matured individual in comparison to a young person.To exemplify, in case of emergency condition
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youth might get
frighten
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frightened
 up
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meeting with an accident, whereas, an elder might take
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
 actions to
prevent the tragedy to
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prevent the tragedy
 happen.
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with growing
age
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 comes experience
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and with it comes the wisdom. Moving
further
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, raising the
age
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 bars may not be sufficient,
government
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the government
 should
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 take strict actions needed:
firstly
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licence
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a licence
 to drive should only be awarded on successfully qualifying the driving test.
Secondly
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complete physical examination of a person should be done like
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eyesight
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any chronic illness
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usage of certain drugs
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which may hamper driving skills.
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heavy fine should be imposed on traffic
rules
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rule
violaters
someone who violates the law
violators
.
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better public transportation facilities should be provided in terms of frequency, fare
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and comfort.
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, all these points may assist to lower down
risk
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the risk
 of accidents. In conclusion,
although
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 the idea of setting a higher
age
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 limit sounds excellent
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However
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I
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 think it is incomplete without
governments
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government
government's
 initiatives.

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