The number of older people is increasing in many parts of the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Due to the advancement in the field of health sector around the globe, lifespan of humans is becoming longer compared to the past.
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essay will emphasize benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, the number of older people has positive aspects for th
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ociety.
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of all, they contribute largely to the society by counse
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something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
counselling
eading young
gener
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younger
ation in the right way as they are experienced enough.
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, in most cases, in order to do emergency surgery, doctors usually consult with senior experienced doctors rather than younger ones who has few ye
ars experience.
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a few years experience
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of all, when young members of family
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the family
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e and do no
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outside, and
t have enough time to spend with their children, older people, granddad or grandma, are always willing to take care of their grandchildren,
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of giving them to day-care center
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an area that is approximately central within some larger region
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, many people argue that in some societ
ies senior citiz
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societies, senior
ens are considered to be burden
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burdened
me areas. The higher ratio of longet
ivity among
duration of service
longevity
older
inhabitants might
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the older inhabitants
lead the more budget need to be provided by the government to the retirement houses or medical services and pensions as well.
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, rising
number of re
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the rising number
tired people in the country means
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mean
less percentage of workin
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the working class
is directly influence the progress of the country’s economy. Most importantly, because of improvements in medici
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medical
ealth facilities, mortality in the country decrease,
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,
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nation may face density population. Certainly,
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phenomenon brings serious problems. All in all, constant proliferation among older people has sufficient benefits because of their lifelong experience, while high expenditure for the government economy can be the main burden.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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