Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

People were grown up with traditional
education
since alphabets were created. In
this
high-tech era
,
Accept space
,
almost everything is going with technology and some people
are think
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think
about to substitute online
education
in traditional
education
. Different styles of learning
has
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have
different advantages and disadvantages. Online
education
make
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makes
has made
us low costs, saving time and we can access some courses from abroad. On the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
side, online
education
is not responsive, can’t make questions to lecturers instantly, have no opportunity of making friends like
real world
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the real world
. If we are accessing the courses from abroad with
live
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life
lessons
,
Accept space
,
need to aware of the time zones
otherwise
we may miss the class. Traditional
education
is more expensive than online
education
. We need to buy books, need to pay additional charges and have to spend extra time for travelling to reach there.
However
, going to
school
is not just for study, it’s like our
second
home where your friends and teachers will fill your soul with laugh, listen your problems and ease your pains. One more,
school
is one of the place where we can get professional network in seminars, talk shows or
school
activities. In
school
short trips, we will get to know closer and our friendship bond will be stronger than before. By comparing the advantages for two types of learning, traditional
education
has
enormous amount
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an enormous amount
of benefits. Our
school
friends won’t be live in
same places
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the same places
through out
all the way through
throughout
their lives so that we can strengthen our network to
entire nation
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an entire nation
entire nations
or entire world once they spread out. I have no doubt traditional
education
is
irreplaceable how
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irreplaceable, how
good online
education
is.
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