Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Some people argue that we no longer remember the original meaning of traditional and religious events.Back
then
,
Accept space
,
people's entertainments and having
fun
would be p
rimary
Suggestion
primarily
from their stand.I a
m totally agree
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totally agree
that enjoyments s
eems
Suggestion
seem
to be p
riority
Suggestion
a priority
,
Accept space
,
however
, i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
do not agree people have forgotten what these f
eativals
a day or period of time set aside for feasting and celebration
festivals
mean.
Initially
, people are getting to have
fun
, purchasing gifts for their c
losests
a small room (or recess) or cabinet used for storage space
closets
and having delicious, rich dishes during festival
time
rather than practising their religion.They think it is only
time
for enjoyment.
For example
, the c
hristmas
a Christian holiday celebrating the birth of Christ; a quarter day in England, Wales, and Ireland
Christmas
day would be g
ood example
Suggestion
a good example
,
Accept space
,
here to prove my point.People who are living in the U
k
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UK
,
Accept space
,
look forward to c
hristmas festival.
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the Christmas festival
Christmas festival
This
is because
,
Accept space
,
that
time
they have a big holidays and back
then
they tend to spend
time
with their immediate family and having
fun
.I mean they buy special souvenirs for their dears and socialize with their loyal friends and even o
rginise
being a member of or formed into a labor union
organised
organize
organized
a party to celebrate
this
festival.They mostly spend their
time
for that kind of activity throughout festivals.
However
, I a
m strongly disagree
Suggestion
strongly disagree
am strongly disagreeing
have strongly disagreed
with
this
as people had better to learn background of that f
estivals.
Suggestion
festival
This
might turn their perspectives and they start treating as original meanings of these festivals.In my opinion, religious festivals only mean people should practise their religions, hope quiet f
or
Suggestion
in
the world and long life for compatriots from g
od
the supernatural being conceived as the perfect and omnipotent and omniscient originator and ruler of the universe; the object of worship in monotheistic religions
God
rather than to have
fun
.The i
ndian
the end of a word (a suffix or inflectional ending or final morpheme)
ending
could be g
ood example,
Suggestion
a good example
the good example
here.Their h
ollywood
the film industry of the United States
Hollywood
festival is related to their religion and all i
ndian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
people tend to practise their religion at that
time
.It is a clear sign of maintaining these festivals real meanings. In conclusion,
although
, all celebration g
ive
Suggestion
gives
fun
time
for people, they should try to follow all rules of them and treat as their original meanings.

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  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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