Some people think that young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that whether young ones need to get a college degree to advance their knowledge or they should start right away to working life in order to make good implementations to their society. Throughout
this
essay, I will discuss both opinions and give my view which favours the latter. Those who believe young people need to enter the labour market without a need for university degree often think, the experience which may only be taken from the field would have a crucial part to advance their work skills
moreover
contribute their society.
This
is because academic knowledge does generally not answer day-to-day work-related problems since its components mainly based on theories.
For example
, a recent study showed that many university students think the field internships provide more practical expertise than the college courses since seeing possible conflicts and solutions by being present is very highly likely.
On the other hand
, university education gives a greater understanding of sophisticated problems. The reason for
this
, during the college years, students do not only learn insight which is specifically related to their fields but
also
from wide-range approaches and aspects.
This
allows students to build a broad understanding of different kinds of problem, where during their
further
working life
this
can be applied to the upcoming duties. Take an example of a civil engineer and a building technician, they both working in the construction industry,
however
, one of them mainly obliged to apply the regulations that suggested by the other.   In conclusion,
although
entering the job market allows young people to gain experience,
therefore
, contribute their society, I believe that higher education is a must since it can provide young individuals with a sophisticated knowledge the community will benefit at a large.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tertiary education
  • academic pursuits
  • vocational skills
  • innate talent
  • job market
  • hands-on experience
  • entrepreneurial spirit
  • economic landscape
  • higher education
  • apprenticeships
  • graduate employability
  • lifelong learning
  • socio-economic development
  • job readiness
  • workforce integration
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