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Some people argue that by changing our life drastically we can save our future of planet

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Some people argue that by changing our life drastically we can save
our
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the future of our planet
our future of the planet
future
 of
planet
.
Howewr
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However
, I believe that we all want to have
bright
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a bright future
future
 of our
planet
 whatever it costs.
This
 essay will discuss some opinions about changes in our lives.
However I
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However, I
 believe that these days some people are starting realise a big change is necessary to protect and preserve our
planet
.
For Instance
 by stopping exploit natural resources we can give more healthier and
more cleaner
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cleaner
more clean
cleanest
 environment for our
future
 generations. For these reasons I think one of the possible
way
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ways
 of saving the
future
 of the
planet
 is recycling and I believe that it doesn't take much effort to do
this
,
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,
 we just to kill laziness and start doing that
On the other
hand we
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hand, we
 used to our
way
 of the life and I think it
will be hard change
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will be hard to change
 our habits radically.
Actually these
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Actually, these
 days it is impossible to make people leave their cars at home because their cars cause air pollution.
Conversely
 nowadays people usually exploit natural resources wisely
,
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,
 because they can make a large profit on it. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
 would like to say that a lot of things
depends
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depend
 on us and changing the
way
 our lives drastically seems to be the best
way
 of saving our
planet
 for
future
 generations. 212 Words Written by Odilov Muminmirzo
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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