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Students can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the development of science and technology. Globalization and the
internet
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 had a great impact on the study method nowadays. Some individuals believe pupils don’t need the
libraries
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 anymore,
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, I can only agree with part of the statement, and my preference will be discussed in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,
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these days
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 usually get
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 from the
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 of borrowing
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 the convenience and timelines that
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 by the
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, the instruction from the
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 might be more practical than the
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 in the
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, I’m majoring in
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 and communication, we need to learn how to edit pictures with Photoshop, and video editing with Edius. Both software learning is more clear by learning from YouTube rather than
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 but not least, the rapidly evolving tech makes people being lazy to gather the
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, some graduate
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 even use it to write their thesis.
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, the
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 aren’t useless since there are still many elders who read there.
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, people can borrow
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 from the library without paying money.
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, the good study environment supplied by the
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 can’t be replaced by the
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. The most important reason is the accuracy of the resources online is doubtful.
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 might get the wrong
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 if they don’t double-check the authoritative articles. In conclusion,
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 the number of
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 who learn from the net is increasing, the importance of
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 is still undeniable. Since there are still many functions that are irreplaceable.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible information
  • online databases
  • e-books
  • educational websites
  • community centers
  • physical books
  • literacy programs
  • peer-reviewed resources
  • misleading information
  • digital divide
  • high-speed internet
  • underprivileged communities
  • custodians of culture
  • archival material
  • conducive environment
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