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Computer have changed the way people study. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using computers as study aids?

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Currently, most of the people use personal
computer
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 and some of them cannot work or live without computers. Nowadays all the types of computers are developed and created smart ones. Computers have lots of advantages and obviously some of the disadvantages.
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Firstly you
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Firstly, you
 can do things that take a lot of time in a little time by using computers
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For instance
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, it consists of sharing files with flashcard, working on Documents through word
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 excel
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 power point and et cetera. In fact Wifi works better by using
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computer
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a computer
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 than your mobile phone.
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Also you
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Also, you
 can watch your favourite movies on
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 rather than buying a new expensive TV.These days It is really increasing that earn much money by Using computers. Many of bloggers from around the world are making much money by
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 than Master of their profession, like an employer in a big office, solicitors, teachers, and others. Disadvantages of using computers are that it takes a lot of time, becoming poor eyesight, playing video games, especially among youngsters, harmful for human's some of the body parts and health. These days, many Students are going game clubs for 5-6 hours in a day
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 of education. I guess
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 a problematic issue in our country. In conclusion, I think we should use computers for Beneficial projects and own works. I wouldn't prefer to use a PC for Playing video games and doing useless things.

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