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Universities should accept equal numbers of malle and femal in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the
life
 needs men and women for ongoing. They are not separate from each other, neither university nor other part of
life
.
Thus
, I believe firmly male and female are always equal. I will explain my idea in the following paragraph.
First
 of all, I would like to share about situation’s women in the past. In the past generation, we can touch many differences between men and women during the
life
for instance
, they didn’t have any choices even for going to the school or getting married.
On the other hand
, there were many difficulties they sometimes weren’t able to choose her favourite colour or dress.
Although
, the woman plays significant role in society
such
 as a mother, a sister, a daughter or a wife but they have never seen in their main location. The
second
 of all, I believe all women learned to be firm and strong. In these days, they are everywhere in the society either as a president or as a mother, but who can make up her mind about her
life
.
However
,
this
 shows women can be stronger than past because they are in universities and society.
In addition
, I want to mention that there are a lot of men who support his wife or his mother or sister. They could pass their
life
 step by step as well. In conclusion, I am a happy and succeed woman because I could be in every universities
next
 to the men. Society saw me as similar as men. So I can, I will.

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