Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some individuals think that
tourists
in other nations should follow local clothes and morality, but the other group believe that the host country should welcome the varieties of other cultures.
If local people try to pay more attention to their heritage and culture
, they can be a tourist attraction. Because this
action helps people to preserve their culture
firstly
and many tourists
come to their city to get more income. This
is a kind of investment and financial prospect for the future. In addition
, foreign tourists
will come to see this
culture
by making advertisements and providing more facilities for them. For example
, Muslim countries
are forbidden from consuming both pork and alcohol. Hence
, visitors who fail to follow these traditions may be seen as disrespectful to the local culture
and may cause offence to the local population.
On the other hand
, accepting the cultural differences of the host country brings different strategies for themselves. One of the positive aspects is that when visitors come to this
country, they should spend more time trying different foods and customs. Also
, there is a good opportunity for them to expand their communities and trade their culture
. For instance
, Iran is the best sample of foods, traditions, and clothes for countries
. Regarding this
, in the south-eastern of Iran like Sistan and Balochistan, music, customs, and accent are similar to Pakistan. So, in this
area, the government should hold some festivals to absorb tourists
from other countries
.
In conclusion, there is an argument between two groups of people about culture
. One of them claims that other countries
should follow local customs and behaviour, whereas
other groups believe that the host nation should welcome cultural differences.Submitted by brightstargalaxy on
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task achievement
Introduction needs to better define the topic and outline the structure to give a more comprehensive overview of the essay.
coherence cohesion
Some paragraphs lack a clear topic sentence which makes it harder to follow the main points.
task achievement
Some ideas need further development and explanation to fully convey the arguments presented.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to maintain a logical flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed in the essay.
task achievement
The essay addresses both perspectives on the issue, fulfilling the requirements of the task.
task achievement
Relevant examples, such as references to Muslim countries and specific regions in Iran, help illustrate the argument.
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