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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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In the meantime, It is an old style to have
experiences
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experience
 in a particular field in your business
life
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. The modern style is to have the ability to work in different types of jobs, as it will help you to keep our financial statement safe and we can develop our academic learning for
rest
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the rest
 of
life
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.In my opinion the best way to achieve significant success in your
life
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 is to know many different skills in several careers.
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 essay will discuss the reason in detail.
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 with, most huge companies set a condition for any employee to be multi-task.The employee must know all knowledge about his position and other positions in other departments, as owners give any extra profits for their employees based on
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 condition.
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, the employee will have the opportunity to promote according to that.
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, I watch on TV that a famous businessman in Egypt promotes one of his employees to be a sales
manager
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manager, although
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 he starts
in
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at
with
 the company as
driver
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a driver
, but he develops himself to know a new career, and achieve his dream to shift his job.
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Therefore he
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Therefore, he
 changes his
life
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 forever to be at the best level.
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, people can enhance their income if they learn new skills. The
revaluation
a drastic and far-reaching change in ways of thinking and behaving
revolution
 in technology and
internet
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the internet
 open new chances to know about any kind of business. We can now learn new talents through online courses and work from home during our free time. As examples government in Australia established twenty websites for freelancing jobs to give more opportunities for those people have only one career. In conclusion, The best valuable idea is to have many skills to work in many jobs.
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 to that, if we can find many sources to gain money, we will bey happy and feeling comfortable in our
life
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.
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Moreover we
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Moreover, we
 will be updated all the time about any knowledge through keeping our self
in
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at
 the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 of education scene.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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