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It has been said, Not everything that is learned is contained in books. Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

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People are learning and practicing through their entire life. I believe that life
experience
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 and practice are the basic reasons of the humankind's evolution.
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, in my opinion,
knowledge
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 gained from bo
oks plays a
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books, plays
 very important role in the modern life. The most obviously important advantage of books is that they hold all
knowledge
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 gained by previous generations. People write books about their discoveries and inventions, which are gained through practice and
experience
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.
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knowledge
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 is accumulated in books that are passed from generation to generation. So, basically, people get all
knowledge
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 about the previous achievements from books, an
alyze i
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
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t and th
an,
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
according to their
experience
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 and new data, write new books. In
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 case, books are the holders of humankind's
experience
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.
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, at old times people thought that the Earth was flat. It was concluded from observations and st
uddying.
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
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, the
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 generations, using the
experience
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 of their ancestors, proved that the Earth was round. Personally, I think that books are very important because they are able to give people the basic and fundamental
knowledge
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. Books store history, the important events and discoveries. Without them it is difficult and sometimes impossible to move forward, make new discoveries and inventions. To summarize, I think a person should take basic
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 from books because it will help him to make his own inventions, conclusions and discoveries. Only using both books and ones
experience
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 one can move forward.
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