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Solving enviromental problems should be the responsibility of one inernational organization rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 day and age, along with the rapid development of modern society, a wide range of problems related to the environment is inevitable. From my personal perspective, an international organization and local government should join hands to handle the green issues and distribute the responsibility equally. On the one hand, I am of the opinion that addressing the green issues is the duty of one transnational organization.
Firstly
, there are plenty of reasons that lead to environmental problems
such
 as air pollution, global warming, deforestation and even more severe natural calamities like ice-melting in both North and South Pole, greenhouse effect, ozone depletion. Those causes that I have just mentioned occur worldwide and have negative impacts on all countries regardless of how wealthy they are. No single nation can deal with these issues completely,
thus
 having a global organisation to solve these problems would allow greater cooperation among countries.
Secondly
, some undeveloped countries may lack experience and
required techniques to
Suggestion
techniques required to
 tackle the green issues effectively.
Therefore
, unless rich countries subsidize poor ones, it would be impossible to wipe out those matters.
On the other hand
, I am in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of the idea that every local government should handle their own environmental problems. Each nation has its own issues which stem from a variety of causes and
as a result
, different approaches and solutions must be imposed timely to minimize the consequences of these problematic issues.
For instance
, in recent years, China has experienced a serious air pollution due to the huge amount of exhausted fumes emitted by personal vehicles. In order to remedy
this
 problem, Chinese authority has lifted a ban to vehicles commuting in major cities during rush hours. Meanwhile, some countries in Africa have to suffer a severe drought that results in thousands of people have insufficient fresh water.
Hence
, it is undoubted that every nation should come up with their distinct solution to handle their green issues. In conclusion,
although
 it is argued that the duty of preserving the environment should fall to one international organization
instead
 of local governments, I do believe that
this
 phenomenon should be coped with together to get the maximum effects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • nation's jurisdiction
  • international collaboration
  • global response
  • coordinated effort
  • enforcing environmental laws
  • sharing best practices
  • innovations and technologies
  • critical resources and knowledge
  • international agreements
  • equitable distribution
  • accountability
  • oversight
  • local context
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