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Some people say that the education system is the only critical factor in the development of a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Education is considered as a key factor in the growth of any
nation
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 by many individuals.I
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firmly, agree with
this
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 belief and
forythcoming
at ease in talking to others
forthcoming
 paragraphs will support my
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
.
literate
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Literate
 population is the pillar of any developed
nation
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.
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 More the literacy rate means more proficient work force and
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, a better production
,
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which ultimately leads to a strong economy.
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, if a state has an adequate amount of professionals
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obiously
unmistakably ('plain' is often used informally for 'plainly')
obviously
 will have good industry as compared to the one who has not enough skilled persons.
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, it can be seen clearly that an education plays a vital role in a country's economy. The other major impact of education is on society
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 Educated people may
built
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build
 a society free from
strotypes
a conventional or formulaic conception or image
stereotypes
 and other bad elements
such
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 as: drugs, crime and many more as they are aware about every
aspest
a distinct feature or element in a problem
aspect
 of life and raise good standards of living which
,
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in turn, develop a modal society and
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, take part in
devlopment
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the development
development
developments
 of a
nation
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 by attracting more tourists and industry. In conclusion, an education system of a country reflects its image
world wide
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
 and gives a skilled labour which enhance
industry
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the industry
, and ultimately the economy of a
nation
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