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The pie charts give information about 4 different products (Cotton,Wheat,Vegetable,Fruit)which exported in Uzbekistan between 2012 and 2018.

The pie charts give information about 4 different products (Cotton,Wheat,Vegetable,Fruit)which exported in Uzbekistan between 2012 and 2018.
The pie charts give information about 4 different products (Cotton,Wheat,Vegetable,
Fruit
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and Fruit
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)which exported in Uzbekistan between 2012 and 2018.
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, as is observed the most exported product was constituted by cotton in 2012,
while
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 the export of wheat comprised
of
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apply
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the lowest point in 2018. In terms of Cotton, it experienced a noticeable decrease which accounted for 50% in 2012 and 15% in 2018.
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, the percentage of wheat started at 30% at the beginning of the year and fell to one in ten in the final period.
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, there was not a big difference in the percentage of fresh fruits and vegetables, which witnessed
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 rise throughout
this
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 period. In fact, fresh fruits showed an increase of 10% in 2012 and 40% in 2018. When it comes to
Vegetable
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vegetables
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, the percentage had increased to 33
percent
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per cent
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 by 2018.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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