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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are different methods to teach
children
 discipline. Some
parents
 believe that spanking is the best way to develop
children
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 behaviour.
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argue
that
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why physical punishments are absolutely preposterous. There are
larger
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 number of
parents
 following physical punishments for teaching their
children
disciplne
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discipline
. By doing
that
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that child
those children
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children
 will
easly
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easily
obay
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obey
by
 the
parents
 and they will be
affraid
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afraid
about
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the
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slapping when they think about doing
mischivous
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mischievous
 activities next time.
For example
, some
parents
 beat their
children
 when they notice that
children
 are wasting water
unnecessarly
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unnecessarily
unnecessary
. Surveys
shows
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 that in many families,
parents
 are using
such
panishments
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punishments
punishment
 on
children
.
On the other hand
, some
parents
 believe that
punshing
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punishing
pushing
punching
 a child physically is not the best method to teach him or her discipline in their life. Because they feel that punishing
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means of physical activities can cause
children
 to become
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stubborn
 and
also
 to become
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 from
the
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parents
. It can
also
 affect them mentally. So
according to
 them
explaing
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explaining
explain
explains
the
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kid
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kids
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 what wrong they did and
correct
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 them is the best method. Recent surveys done in
United
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states
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saying
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 that many
parents
 are now
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oppose
opposed
 to physical punishments
such
 as smacking or spanking.
To conclude
,
this
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that
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why some
parents
 are doing physical
punshiments
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punishments
punishment
 on
thier
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their
children
 and its consequences. In my
opinion
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 it is
abolutely
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absolutely
ridiculas
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ridiculous
 to
smak
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smack
children
.
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