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Band 7

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The education system should not be based on
gender
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. I do not fully accord with the notion that, The educational institutes should grant admissions in institute to fill the equal proportion of the male and female candidate and the following treatise will explicit the reasons behind the same. The
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 and foremost reason is the requirement of the course,
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 undoubtedly some are of great advantage to the men in comparison of the women. While might some demands more of the female candidates. The courses like, "Business Management" is suitable for both the humans. While "marketing" consider best for men as it required lot of a physical strength. To exemplify
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 point, It can be stated that more females give preference to study Medicals over Information technology. Another compelling argument in
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 is the restrictions could not be imposed in order to fill the classes on the basis of
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. The people are free to choose subjects they want to study, regardless the numbers of male or female required. Admissions in universities cannot be restricted to the proportion of
gender
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 to retain.
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, In India, where the population is high and the count of male over female is hefty.
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 it would be difficult for the women to secure a place in an educational institute, if the university admission system based on completing
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 proportions. To recapitulate, after contemplating it can be stated that, Education system should be free from all the liabilities and
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 selection of courses should not be in
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restricting
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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