Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. Do you agree or disagree.

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Some
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
argue that
,
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,
so-called sports should be prohibited by authorities because they tend to be very dangerous.I totally disagree with
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due to substantial income from them and
sportpeoples'
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special clothes.
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, people who are being
took
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taken
part in
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the show
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sports types always put on their special outfit during their performance.I mean that their expensive belts, jackets and other their garments.
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could help them to reduce
possibility
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the possibility
of accidents.
Furthermore
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, these
sportmen
someone who engages in sports
sportsmen
are prepared
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prepare
have been prepared
for their any performance for many years by attending
soecial
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
special
courses which are
orginised
being a member of or formed into a labor union
organised
organized
by idol sport people in
this
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sports
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sport
.The central Asian competition could be
good example
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a good example
good examples
here to prove my point.
Sportpeople
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Sport people
who participate in
this
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, well-prepared, skilled and experienced.According to
korean
a flow of electricity through a conductor
current
research, they prepare for
this
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tournament during two years at least.
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, they are provided with special clothes properly by The Central Asian Sport Association
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(
CASA).
it
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It
is a clear sign of their safety is not
uder
at a position directly lower than (with the subject just above)
under
user
older
risk, I guess.
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, that kind of sports
type
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tend
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tends
to be well-paid.I imply sportsmen and sportswomen
wro
the person or persons that; the one that
who
are
training
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trained
in these sports
Use synonyms
type
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types
possess a decent salary.
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, they organise few events throughout a year, they
coul
requests polite permission
could
earn immense amount of money
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.
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is because
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they do not have tendency to quit their profession.They consider that, their high income is solely dependent on
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type
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.I mean
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,
all sport types have
element
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an element
elements
of risk,
however
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,
abovementioned
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above mentioned
had the
firts
preceding all others in time or space or degree
first
when juxtaposed with others.The risky degree of them
determine
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determines
the money from that sport
type
Use synonyms
.
For instance
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, sky divers and mountain climbers take four times as high as wages than soccer players and runners. In
conclision
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
, in spite of their risk, they are very important for
sportspeople
Suggestion
sports people
because of their considerable income.What is more, special clothes of them could minimize accidents significantly from my point of view.
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, the should not be banned, I think.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adrenaline rush
  • risk threshold
  • thrill-seeking
  • safety protocols
  • hazard assessment
  • adventure tourism
  • regulatory framework
  • personal autonomy
  • informed consent
  • risk mitigation strategies
  • thrill-seeking behavior
  • protective gear
  • extreme athleticism
  • freedom of choice
  • accident prevalence
  • emergency response
  • courage and resilience
  • endorphin release
  • legal implications
  • peer pressure effects
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