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In many countries, weddings are getting bigger and more expensive than in the past. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Having luxury ceremonies has been increased these days, especially over the
last
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 decade. In the past, an overwhelming majority of people used to celebrate their wedding
celebration
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 in their own house;
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, nowadays people's mindset has changed towards getting a massive and more costly
celebration
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. From my point of view, despite the fact that it has positive points, it is a negative trend. On one hand, some drawbacks can illustrate that it is a negative development.
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 with, not only will more food, drinks and flowers using for decoration be thrown away, but
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 more energy will be wasted. The more the
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 bigger is, the more the lights are brightened. As a consequence, wasting energy will increase. Apart from
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, expending more money to have bigger and expensively dinner will cause the bride and groom to be in debt for years because they spend more than they save,
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, they will face with some financial problems in the long run and they may not be able to manage their necessary expenditures.
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, if someone holds their wedding on a larger scale, more job opportunities will create to hire more servants to welcome and serve drinks and food for guests.
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, people who have a pleasant network of friends and colleagues will be given the chance of inviting all of their fellows in their
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.
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, because it wastes a huge of money and energy, it is a negative trend. In conclusion,
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 people tend to celebrate more expensive these days, in my opinion,
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 act has merits and demerits which should be considered.
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