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Some believe that history has little to teach us about today while others think that the study of the past helps us to understand the present. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many feel that the past
didnt
did not
didn't
 teach us
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 about present while others believe that it can assist us to more understanding about today. In my opinion, history is a very long period of time, there are a lot of things
this
 world had achieved and there are some dark times. So we could learn from it. Achievement
are made
Suggestion
is made
 throughout history. Inventions
such
 as light by Thomas Edison is one of the most important invention that has a massive impact to present days. The invention of light bulb
isnt
is not
isn't
 an easy process, it has gone through a many trial. Thomas Edison had made 1,000
attempt
Suggestion
attempts
 before he
finally
 succeeded inventing light. From the
accompislment
,
Accept space
,
 he teaches us not to give up and always try. There are times where it is so mournful. A frequently cited example is World
War
 2, that happened in 1939. It started when Germany
didnt
did not
didn't
 accept the loss in World
War
 1 and wanted to take back their glory. Hitler at that time had become the leader of a party called
Nazi
Suggestion
a Nazi
.
This
war
 lasted for 6 years until 1945. During the
war
, a lot of people died, countries were bankrupt, and everyone is suffering. If Germany was given justice in the World
War
 1,
this
 could have been avoided. From
this
 tragic event we could learn to not be greedy and encourage justice to avoid
war
 because there is no good in
war
. In conclusion, history could teach us many things, especially from past achievement and dark times. It gives us several
message
Suggestion
messages
 for us to learn and improve today.

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  • insights
  • root causes
  • current problems
  • past mistakes
  • repeating
  • generations
  • informed decisions
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  • contemporary solutions
  • technological advancements
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