Walking is known to be beneficial for health and yet fewer and fewer people are walking these days. what are the reasons for this?what can be done to tackle this problem?

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Over the past decades walking among the people decreased significantly and it may exert negative influence on their health. There are a variety of reasons why people are disinterested in walking and there are
also
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several solutions to mitigate
this
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situation. Indifferent attitude to walk may be caused by various reasons.
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firstly
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Firstly
a huge number of vehicles
has
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have
limited people's walking and it can lead to
sedentary lifestyle
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a sedentary lifestyle
. In
fact both
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fact, both
individuals' cars and public transports play an integral role in people's life and increasing number of these modes of transport
hasi caused
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have caused
has caused
walking to lose its popularity.
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, a deficiency of public
parks pedestrian
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parks, pedestrian
areas
,
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,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
,
also
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contributes to these and discourages people doing any strenuous activities including walking.
Besides
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, especially due to the booming
population especially
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population, especially
in urban areas, the incentive
to
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for
walking or hiking has decreased nowadays. To tackle
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problem there are various effective solutions that should be taken into account.
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, to invest in constructing sport complexes and public parks in local areas.
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, to set
daily limit
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a daily limit
daily limits
on digital devices
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as Television set, phone, computer and etc.
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this
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This
means that people should refrain themselves from spending a lot of time on technology and allow themselves to have useful activities.
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, to find
apartner
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a partner
were a group of people to do some physical activities, especially, walking, which will bring more emotions than to walk alone and serve to stay motivated. In conclusion,
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the unimportance of walking has become widespread in the modern age,
combination
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the combination
a combination
of individuals' actions and the right investment from governments can make a difference.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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