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Write a letter to a transport office about a problem with the transportation system in your area. •Describe the situation you are facing •Why do you consider it a problem •What change you would like to recommend.

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Good afternoon, dear sir/madam. My name is Anastassia, I have been living in
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 city for more than 5 years. I'm writing
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 letter for the purpose of discussing public transport issues in my area. First of all, let me, please,
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express my humble opinion, that we have the paramount problem in our neighbourhood - the lack of buses in the evening. It's impossible to arrive in our area after 7 p.m.
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, we are a group of teen parents, and we are very worried about our children in the evening hours. We are trying to pick them up when it's possible, but it's a temporal decision. We can't do it forever. We are waiting for a permanent solution to
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 problem. We are convinced, that it is possible to connect one or two more buses late at night to the existing line, in the beginning it may be only at weekends. So we will be more relaxed, and our children more independent. Thanks in advance, best regards. Anastassia.
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suitable writing tone
Ensure to use polite and formal language consistently throughout the letter.
complete response
Expand a bit more on how the proposed solution will benefit the community and improve safety. This will strengthen your case.
logical structure
The structure of the letter is clear and logical. Each paragraph addresses a distinct point, making it easy to follow.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately polite and formal.
complete response
The writer effectively describes the problem and provides a feasible solution, showing a good understanding of the issue.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is generally suitable for the context, conveying concern without being too aggressive.
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