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Every day traffic seems to get worse on our roads. Most people are reluctant to use public transportation. What needs to be done to make public transportation an effective option for more people in your town?

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In these days, the number of people in cities is growing and their streets are becoming increasingly congested. Many people do not
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 and they rely on private cars. In
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 essay, I will discuss some reasons for the problem and measures that can be taken to address
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 issue. One of the major causes of traffic congestion is that people utilize more private cars. They think that public
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 is often slow and unreliable. Cars are much more comfortable.
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, individuals who
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 their own cars can get to their destination faster. They do not need to wait for buses or trains. To tackle
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 problem, the government should impose a tax on using private cars. As a consequence, people will be encouraged to
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 and they will reduce their dependence on cars. Another reason for the tendency of using vehicles rather than public
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 is the low quality of
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. Buses, trains and metro systems are often dirty and crowded.
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, many people complain about the consistency of public tra
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hedules, which can have impacts on their work or study. They spend much time on commuting. A solution to
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 problem is for the government to gentrify and subsidize public
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.
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, public
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 will be more reliable and efficient. People will
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 it more frequently. All in all, I think that public
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 in my city needs a huge investment and there should be a strong penalty for those who wish to drive their own cars so that life can be better for everyone.

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