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"Deforestation is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes and effects of deforestation?

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The number of ecological problems is increasing in a rapidly changing
world
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 day by day and it is widely believed that logging is one of the environmental degradations which continues today all over the
world
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.
This
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 essay will
firstly
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 discuss the primary causes happening in the
world
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 and
secondly
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, look at the effects it might have on society and individuals.
First
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 and foremost, there are some inevitable causes of
desertification
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. It is undeniable that people cut down many types of flora in order to get paper or wood. Take
for instance
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, they provide us books which help us to be educated
by
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with
 the help of these trees.
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, in many rural areas, dwellers do not have any heating systems in their homes and they use wood because of increasing temperatures in rooms. Some companies
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 can be one of the outstanding examples. To put it simply, many businessmen opt to build their facilities near the forests
such
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 as furniture industries, because in
this
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 case, it is accessible to get raw materials whenever they want. There are some major effects of
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 matter not only on individuals, but
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on
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with
for
 animals.
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 of all, it is
fact
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the fact
a fact
 that all humans need
oxygen
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 in order to live and
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 gas is given to us by many kinds of flora. Many plants release
oxygen
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 and absorb a gas which is called carbon-dioxide. If the number of forests decreases, it will generate many adverse impacts on people, because in
this
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 case, the amount of carbon footprint enhances and the quantity of
oxygen
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 rises.
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, forests are habitats for many species of fauna all over the
world
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 and the depletion of woodland culminates in
extinction
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the extinction
 of animals. Taking everything into consideration, deforestation has some causes
such
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 as human factors when people need to get paper or want to provide heating systems for their homes, meanwhile, there are some effects on the
world
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 as the exhaustion of
oxygen
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 or the rise in extinction of animals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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