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Should children be asked by the court who they want to stay with after their parents divorce?

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Nowadays, there are many break-up marriages. Many children become the victims of the end of their
parents’s
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parents’
 relationships. The issue whether or not letting children be asked by the court who they want to stay with has long been a controversial debate. As far as I’m concerned, I approve of the view that children have their right to decide who they want to live with.
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 of all, divorce is parents’s fault, not their children’s.
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, the issue that children can decide who they want to stay with is absolutely logical and reasonable. There is no need for them to listen to the parent’s
decision
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 anymore. That’s why the parents and the judge should respect their kid’s
decision
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 and give them a chance to decide. They should not prevent children from making a
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. Because when children can live with the person love them, it can partly counteract the consequences that they need to endure.
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, children know the most important things for them in their life and have a right to decide
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 Nowadays, many parents think that they can bring the best things for them. Not only their decisions may be not suitable for their children, but it can
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 ruin the children’s life by accident and
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 can make the children hate them.
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, the kid who wanted love from their
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parents, but
 they gave him their money.
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, he became a criminal who thought that money can deal with everything. To sum up, every divorce is full of sorrow. Taking youth
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 into consideration can reduce the negative effects of it and help them overcome the mental problems.

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