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Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples.

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In today’s era, people are forgetting old customs, traditions, cultures and beliefs. If people will not preserve its own native customs and traditions,
then
 they will lose its own identity in
this
 world. One of the most valued Indian tradition which I believe every country should adopt or remain alive is living in Joint families. Today culture of living in joint families, especially in western countries has disappeared. People prefer to live in nuclear families which affect in negative way in a long run. The primary advantage of living in joint family is a sense of togetherness among family members. There is peace and harmony among elders, children, siblings, which eventually help to preserve our past beliefs, traditions and cultures.
For instance
, children able to spent quality time with results in passing of old values and traditions to offspring. These preserve the customs and harmony is maintained in the family.
However
, in nuclear families, people tend to take decision on their own and
also
 not suggested by their ancestors.
Hence
, Joint families are more helpful in creating peace, harmony and a sense of togetherness in today’s competitive era.
Moreover
, living in big family
also
 helps a lot difficult or critical situation.
For example
, my cousin met with an accident
last
 year and need a surgery which was costing around 2
lakhs
. As my uncle income is low, he cannot afford paying
such
 high valued bill. In
such
 case, my father, grandfather helps him financially to solve the problem. In
such
 situation, living in joint families helps to fight financial problems, Social problems and morals. In case of nuclear families, all problems need to be solved alone without the intervention of any other family member. If
such
 problem had not been solved, the family would have to face stressful life. In
such
 situation, there are chances that an individual might take negative steps. To sum-up, living together creates a more sensible family than living alone. People tend to be more positive, peaceful, lively and sensible by living in joint families.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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