some people think that it is fine for professional sportsmen and sportswomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#people #sportsmen #sportswomen #misbehave #field

Many

individuals

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individuals'

individual

individual's

belief

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beliefs

that international athletes can behave badly when they are doing excellent in their field or reached

highest peak

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the highest peak

in their career. I completely disagree with

this

statement. On the one hand, one of the main reasons why I believe professional

players

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players'

player

behaviour

should be proper? Mainly, every sports person who has done exceptionally great in their game will become a role model and inspiration to the entire world. Now-a-days, many younger

generations follow

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generations to follow

their

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

sportsmen or sportswomen and copy their

behaviour

and style. Here, most of the parents give

example

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an example

to their children about famous player because of their attitude and dedication.

For Example

, recently in tennis one incident took place where top rank player Nadal hit the ball

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girl's face

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the girl's face

a girl's face

by mistake and immediately he came and shown concern.

Hence

, everybody applauded to Nadal for his

behaviour

in the entire stadium.

On the other hand

, the conduct of many sports

person

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people

persons

is very essential.

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A's

, they will be representing many products and brands for well known companies. In fact, many

organisation

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organisations

sponsor their brand on the recognition of that athlete in the form advertisements. Generally, majority of audience purchase any

products only

Accept comma addition

products, only

because of that personality. If they show poor

behaviour

than it will impact on their endorsements

such

as losing contracts from companies.

For Instance

, Steve smith skipper of

Australia cricket team

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the Australia cricket team

was suspended from cricket for 2 years due to ball scandal and he even got

critised

find fault with; express criticism of; point out real or perceived flaws

criticised

criticized

for his

behaviour

. In Conclusion, I totally disagree with the statement that top player should stop behaving badly as they are acting as a role model to many people and it might give negative influence to

public

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the public

and sports.

Fri Apr 10 2020

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